olivet discourse

I thought I was a member of a writing group on this site, or perhaps that was on another website forum. Anyways I would like feedback on my latest article just as long as feedback is only on this article and not on something else that I wrote (which would be off topic). Also I am not interested in theological debates as my audience and intended reader is dispensationalist, and I have no plan or purpose to try and persuade Reformed and others of a different persuasion.